Hey, I sent a friend request, but didn't send a message with it. Sorry! I meant to tell you that this is Brian from the First 5 Pages group, and I just went over your critique. You mentioned that you'd like to read more. If you care to read more, you're welcome to do so. I don't mind emailing it to you if you'd like to read the first draft. Just know that I plan to cut about 100-150 pages and restructure some things for the second draft, before it goes to editing (the main action of the story comes in too late, so I need to get there quickly by cutting out a lot). Right now, I'm in need of overall critiques on storyline, characters, plots, etc. That'll greatly help me restructure the second draft. I've been told that once the action hits, the story gets really good. I think I spent too much time on developing the romance rather than getting to the action. If you care to read the book, I'd love your feedback! You can email me at: cephyr13@yahoo.com if you like and I can send a copy of the MS. Thanks so much!
Thank you for adding me to your friends list. Sorry I didn't Accept earlier -- am still finding the time to check in here regularly. Good luck on your query.
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Hey, I sent a friend request, but didn't send a message with it. Sorry! I meant to tell you that this is Brian from the First 5 Pages group, and I just went over your critique. You mentioned that you'd like to read more. If you care to read more, you're welcome to do so. I don't mind emailing it to you if you'd like to read the first draft. Just know that I plan to cut about 100-150 pages and restructure some things for the second draft, before it goes to editing (the main action of the story comes in too late, so I need to get there quickly by cutting out a lot). Right now, I'm in need of overall critiques on storyline, characters, plots, etc. That'll greatly help me restructure the second draft. I've been told that once the action hits, the story gets really good. I think I spent too much time on developing the romance rather than getting to the action. If you care to read the book, I'd love your feedback! You can email me at: cephyr13@yahoo.com if you like and I can send a copy of the MS. Thanks so much!
Hi Ellen,
Thank you for adding me to your friends list. Sorry I didn't Accept earlier -- am still finding the time to check in here regularly. Good luck on your query.
StaffC. Lee McKenzie said…
Thanks for adding me to your friends. Great to meet you here on yalitchat.
Thank you so very much for the kind comments on my First 5 snip-it! It is greatly appreciated.
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