Glad my comments could help! I enjoyed the first pages. The whole mystery setting intrigued me...although maybe more context (is this a masquerade party? why has she never seen his face? what is he doing there? etc.) would probably ground readers more. Definitely an engaging beginning. Good luck!
Cool. My email is ncobb001 at gmail dot com with. I'm currently working on a steampunk urban fantasy about a girl with amazing mechanical skill and her adventures with an eccentric but dangerous (and hot) mage. I'll probably be working on my contemporary story during NaNoWrimo, but if you want to swap pages I'd be happy to do so as well. (it might take me a while to send things out though, but I'm happy to read and critique what you have regardless)
Hey! What I usually do is this- I send the whole MSS in .doc format and then use the comment feature in MS Word for reviewing. If you want, you could send the whole MSS or send the first chapter and go from there.
I saw your post on Crit Seekers and I was hoping that I could assist you. I too read/write contemporary ya and fantasy (urban/paranormal/steampunk). If you want to swap pages, I'll be willing to help you out. You can leave a comment on my page or message me.
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