Thank you for your feedback, Bonnie! I'm sorry I'm so late in commenting back, but I went from a MRSA experience with two of three kids to Hurricane Sandy. No dull moments, I'm afraid.

I did put your advice into the revisions I've made. Now we're up together on the Query Kick Around. Did you miss Monday's post because of Sandy, too?

To Bonnie

From Laura and YALitChat!

Hi Bonnie!  You're not new anymore! :-) But I still am. Having fun here?

 

Thanks for requesting me. Nice to meet ya! :) I haven't been on much, but need to get back in the swing of things :)

Hi Bonnie! I really liked the sound of your story! Best of luck with the agent panel! :)

Hi Bonnie! Yes, you are in the right place now! Yay! Glad to be of help! :) Great Luck with your submission!

Hi Bonnie!

I noticed that you still haven't moved your submission. Right now you have it in "Discussion Forum", and it needs to be posted in the "COMMENTS" area (right below).  Deadline is tomorrow, so I hope you get this message. :) Just trying to help a fellow author! ♥

Warmest Wishes,

Cameo

Bonnie,

 

Based on this thread: (http://yalitchat.ning.com/group/agentinbox/forum/topics/welcome-to-agent-mailbox) I read down in the comments and realized we should have posted in the comments section of the page for proper submission. You might want to repost there and delete the comment above. FYI.

Best of luck in the submission process!

Regards,

Don

Dear Bonnie,

Thank you for taking a look at my query. The one you looked at (2.0) is actually the old version. If possible, please take a look at the FINAL version. I hope it reads better and less vaguely. Thank you so much for your help!

Warm regards,

Don

Hi Bonnie,  I have been off line for some time, but recently dropped a few commitments to further focus on my book. Welcome!

Hi Bonnie. NIce to meet you. Lovely book covers.

Hello Bonnie. It's nice to see you here :) Congrats on your release!

Hi Bonnie, welcome!

 

Hi Bonnie! Just wanted to welcome you to YAlitchat!! Love your book covers. :)

 So to find the first five and post.. First go to groups -- first pages critique group-- down at the bottom there is a box for general comments..  OR at the bottom of the box that holds all the discussions there is this little button that says + Add a discussion.

 

That is if you want to add your own first five pages. :) At the top of the whole page are guidelines.

 

If you need more details just say.

Hi Bonnie, it's good to meet  you.

Hi Bonnie, and welcome!

Welcome Bonnie-glad you could join us!

 

Hi Bonnie! Glad you're here!