"Trash by Andy Mulligan is another great MG with shifting POV. Mulligan makes the really interesting choice of having each chapter begin very explicitly, like "It's Gardo again, and I'm picking up the story now." I think this is a…"
"I need ya'll to keep me from following up on my fulls when I don't really have a good reason to do so except that waiting is driving me crazy. I keep starting e-mails and then discarding them. I have to just keep waiting, right? One agent…"
"My latest MG is in first person. My first was in a classic third person omniscient, and the voice really didn't come through. I've definitely had more success with my first person. I chose it because I really wanted to focus on voice. That…"
"Great setting, Virginia. You've already given us lots of conflict and the real problems haven't even started. The MC's pain and confusion come through well.
Everyone else has given you great advice on some particulars, but I would…"
"I really like your first sentence. It immediately gets my attention and establishes the tone.
In the third sentence, I’d take out “uncomfortably.” You chose the great word “bristled,” which establishes discomfort…"
Georgia just emailed me. She had some advice and questions for you. Have you queried this ms previously? If you have, requery those agents and put Offer Received, Representation Needed Immediately in the subject line. She also said she could submit you to the Agent Mailbox as a priority, right now, even though the March subs have already gone out. She'd need a full synopsis and a query, though, so the agents can tell if they'd be interested or not.
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