"To Pab From Laura and YALitChat!"

"I think you're on the money with reducing the number of POV switches.  I do like being in each character's head, but htis jumped around a bit too much to be easy to follow. Perhaps alternating chapters? I do like the overall concept…"

"If I continue it there will be considerably more action.  This would probably be better labeled as a "prologue" since its purpose would be to introduce the situation overall and set the scene for the action that follows.  I will…"

"Hi Pab, I love the POV switch and the lead up has me wanting more. I worry it's too in their heads and not action on the page. Would this get more active and present? It's a nice tension build hearing from each of them and them making it a…"

"If being a writer is what really matters to you, then, even if you try to give up; you can't!  Like you, years ago I was tired of the constant rejection - so, I gave up writing, or, at least I though I did... There were stories inside of…"

"This is such an interesting discussion! I am a newby, querying my first manuscript to a grand total of one agent (so far!). I am convinced that this is what I want to do, therefore, I will do it. Honestly, I like being in a writing group and sharing…"

"I'm sure by now, with all the supportive posts I've read, that you're back on track. I think the thing that we all have been reminded of is that we write because we have to. It is an innate part of our makeup, a compelling force that…"

"I'll give up when it's no longer fun. I admit, submissions are no fun but writing is. It is what keeps me sane. I agree with the others. Don't  let rejection be the reason you quit.  "

"I'm writing a YA mystery too, though it's of a lighter nature and about embezzlement. It's already been suggested, but I would definitely agree with something to do with a scholarship/college admission. Maybe involve a steroid scandal…"

"I completely agree about making the murder about lack of control than premeditated murder because me, personally, I would relate to it  better. Unless ur killer is psychotic which is  always interesting."

"Somebody I coached with found my writing journal once and thought a map I had drawn detailed where I hid a body...lol...so that totally can happen."

"Maybe it could be something from another accident that happened. An accident that maybe the person or protagonist holds themselves accountable for and they try to stop the person who is black mailing them. Or you could go the bullying route. Maybe…"

"I am trying to think what a teen would value so much that he/she would kill over it...is the data evidence of another crime? A school gambling ring? A dog-fighting club? And the information can't get out, or it will ruin his scholarship to…"