"I’m seeking representation for SEVERED, a 75,000-word alternate history young adult novel and re-envisioning of the classic Pinocchio story. I think you would be a good fit because blah blah blah.
Seventeen-year-old Penelope glides through…"
"Wow! I didn't get that vibe from the query. That really adds danger and sympathy for her. It brings questions to mind - are those things that he has hidden in her memories. Then - does she really want to remember? …"
Hi Nikki, I'm new to this so take my comments with a big shot of salt.
Neat spin on an old story.
Seventeen-year-old Penelope glides through life as a ballet dancer and student at the estate of prestige manor…"
The premise for your novel sounds fascinating. However, I am having trouble figuring out the plot from this query. Be careful using descriptions that mean little to a reader/agent when not in context, eg. prestige manor lord,…"
"Love the twist on Pinocchio! I agree with Eliza. Clarifying that her old memories are false, that her real memories hold the truth, that her memories are constantly being tampered with so she doesn't know what's true and what's fake…"
"Adding the word..until her programmed/fake memories fail her and she questions everything she remembers.
that will help clarify that her memories aren't her own. I would definitely add in the tampering part...As she tries to remember the past,…"
"First, I love the idea. What a great take on the old tale.
I found the memory aspect confusing.
First her memories fail her, then they hold the truth, then she can't remember and it ends wit--she could lose them forever.
Instead of saying her…"
"My kids are at camp this week, and although I have six hours to myself - I find I can only ultimately spend an hour or two writing. I am so distracted, but then berate myself at the end of the day when I only have 1500 words finished. I'm…"
"ARCHIPELAGO, YA Sci-Fi/Elemental, Nikki Katz
Instead of kicking butt in her school's volleyball tournament, seventeen-year old Helene Brooke is kidnapped, dropped into a volcano wormhole, and lands in the 22nd century. In this…"
"Hi everyone! I'm going to put together a thread on "Romance" and was hoping you'd share your favorite tips or resources for adding romance to your YA novel.
Whether it's tips for writing a kissing scene, or how to up…"
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