"Name: Nicole ZoltackCategory: PBGenre: FantasyPitch: Amy doesn't want a kitten, a puppy, or a canary for a pet. Only a unicorn will do. But a dog dressed up as a unicorn and a fairy haven’t helped Amy find one. Will Amy ever have a…"
"Name: Nicole ZoltackCategory: PBGenre: FantasyPitch: Knight Peter wants to be the biggest, bravest knight there ever was, but terrible dragons make him tremble in his armor and dangerous cliffs frighten him. When the other knights tease him, he…"
"Name: Nicole Zoltack
Genre: Fantasy Adventure
When ten-year-old Princess Cassandra and her friend Vance leave Sun Haven to explore the Falls, their misadventure leaves Vance unable to use his left leg. Unfortunately, Sun Haven is a…"
"Name: Nicole Zoltack
Upon learning her birth mother sought the help of witches to conceive her, fifteen-year-old Crystal Miller's previously unwavering faith is shaken to the core. It's not everyday you…"
I like the imagery of your opening line (make sure you keep your tenses consistent here, and on page 4). The idea of secrets in the attic immediately roused my curiosity.
Many of the agents/editors I've heard speak recently about first…"
"Hi Nicole. I love the idea but the mix of past and present tense made it a hard read. Perhaps, a good idea would be to read it aloud, I find it helps to pick out area's of concern. That said, you still had me intrigued to know more.
"I like the character voice in this. She's curious and intrigued and responsible/respectful of mom and the rules, but strong enough to want to test them for the right reason. You work in various descriptions in a natural way (the dust in…"
"Nicole Zoltack - Upper MG Fantasy - ELENA'S PEN
Thirteen-year-old wannabe novelist Elena doesn't care about school, only her stories. She's thrilled when everything she writes with her new pen comes true, including the class bully…"
"Nicole Zoltack - MG Fantasy Adventure - THE PRINCESS'S TREASURE HUNT
Ten-year-old Princess Cassandra prefers adventures to fashion, the wild outdoors to the stuffy castle, and her commoner friends to the ladies-in-waiting. The reckless…"
"Nicole Zoltack - YA Paranormal - CRYSTAL'S MAGIC
Fifteen-year-old Crystal believes God answers nearly all of her prayers until she discovers her mother sought the help of witches to conceive her. She tracks down the witches, who tell her…"
"Nicole Zoltack - YA Fantasy - KIDNAPPED HEARTS
Nearing princess spinsterhood at sixteen, Princess Leila vows to change her people's opinion of her and dresses as a commoner for a walk in the village only to be kidnapped by a dragon. Nor is she…"
Welcome Nicole! If you're ready to dive in, I invite you to check out the first pages group. We've got lots of first pages up just waiting for feedback from members like you. Hope to see you there. ~ Jessie
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