"On a bright summer day in 1284, a mysterious man known only as the Rat Catcher led one hundred thirty children into a mountain. This is the story of what happened next.
***Great start. I always wanted to know what happened to the children of…"
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Bonnie Ferrante replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around
Kym Balthazar Fetsko replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"Thanks Caryn! Your suggestions are helpful and appreciated!!!"
Kym Balthazar Fetsko replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"Thanks for thinking of my story when you saw this. I agree, it seems THE RAT CHILDREN may be a good fit. I'll be sure to add her to my list when this one's ready to get sent out.
~Kym"
Kym Balthazar Fetsko replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"Thanks Kim!
These suggestions are fantastic ~
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Caryn DeVincenti replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"Hi Kym,
Great job with the revisions. Sounds like a great read! I'm still a tad confused in some areas. Nothing major, and I'm no expert, but here goes...
On a bright summer day (WORDY PART OF THE SENTENCE. CAN YOU…"
Kim Trotter replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"I was researching lit agents for a post I'm going to make later today on my blog and came across Alyssa Eisner Henkin at Trident Media Group. When I saw what she's seeking I immediately thought about this book:
That sounds just…"
Kim Trotter replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"On a bright summer day in 1284, a mysterious man known only as the Rat Catcher led one hundred thirty children into a mountain. This is the story of what happened next.
I’m still against this. For the exclusion of the date, you tell us…"
Kym Balthazar Fetsko replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"Michelle ~
Again, thanks so much for helping me out! I'll try to repay the favor.
Kym"
Kym Balthazar Fetsko replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"Thanks for checking it out Stephanie!"
Stephanie Wardrop replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"I'm with Michelle on this one and will wait for a revision. Good luck! This sounds awesome."
Michelle Levy replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion THE RAT CHILDREN (Revised) in the group Query Kick-Around"I LIKE THIS VERSION BETTER! JUST TIGHTEN IT UP A BIT. WELL DONE.
Lured by the Rat Catcher’s unforgettable song, ten-year-old Milo Schumacher finds he’s HIMSELF trapped in HAUNTING, MYSTICAL Lully Manor, a haunting, mystical place. …"
Kym Balthazar Fetsko replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion Query ~ THE RAT CHILDREN in the group Query Kick-Around"Hi Kim,
I have to admit, when I first read your comments, I was like "ouch!" But you were spot on with your critique, and because of it, I'm (hopefully) going to be able to tweak it to make more sense.
I'm off to work on…"
Kim Trotter replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion Query ~ THE RAT CHILDREN in the group Query Kick-Around"This is important: it gives a justification for the whole time travelling thing (sort of). This is also very interesting -- I'd add this into the query letter and not mention the NYC. Particularly if it only happens at the end of the book.…"
Kym Balthazar Fetsko replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion Query ~ THE RAT CHILDREN in the group Query Kick-Around"Hi Kim,
Thank you for your thorough and constructive suggestions. Query letters are not my strong suit. Some of your points reminded me why.
To clarify some things which might bring my plot into better focus, the Rat Catcher is an…"
Kim Trotter replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion Query ~ THE RAT CHILDREN in the group Query Kick-Around"First reaction: It's 363 words! Wow. That's a lot. Query letters should be more like 250.
End reaction: I see how a lot of those words can be cut, so the word length isn't that big of an issue.
Dear Agent,
On a bright…"
Kym Balthazar Fetsko replied to Kym Balthazar Fetsko's discussion Query ~ THE RAT CHILDREN in the group Query Kick-Around"Hi Caryn,
I'm appreciative that you took the time to help me out with this. Query writing is not my strong suit.
Your suggestions will help get me closer to making this sound the best it can.
Many thanks!
Kym"
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- At 12:22am on February 19, 2013,
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- At 5:13am on February 19, 2012,
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- At 10:56am on September 20, 2011,
StaffNicōle Olea said… Hi Kym! Your account has been updated to a Tier II membership (For this one.) I have another account for you on file: http://yalitchat.ning.com/profile/KymBalthazarFetsko if you're no longer using it could you please delete it.
Thank you!
Nicole
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- At 9:43pm on May 13, 2011,
Amber Skye Forbes said… - Congrats on signing with an agent!
- At 7:19pm on March 7, 2011,
Cindy L. Rodriguez said… Hi Kym,
Thanks for adding me as a friend. I look forward to chatting with you here.
- At 5:19pm on February 19, 2011,
StaffRoza marie said… - Happy Birthday!
- At 1:38pm on February 19, 2011,
StaffSheri Larsen said… - Happy Birthday!!
- At 9:20am on February 18, 2011,
StaffJessie Harrell said… - Since I won't be on tomorrow probably, HAPPY EARLY BIRTHDAY! Hope this is the year your pub dreams come true.
- At 11:04am on October 23, 2010,
StaffSheri Larsen said… - Hey Kym. I got your message. I'd love to read for you. The only thing is right now I'm in the final edits of my ms before I send it off to two pubbed authors who've offered to line edit for me. I'm thinking that's another week or so. Then I have two other manuscripts I'm editing for others. You can, however, send me the first couple chapters and I'll get to them within the next couple of weeks. I'm doing that for Roza.
- At 10:28pm on September 22, 2010, Amber Skye Forbes said…
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