"Thanks for sharing Jaime.
I think you could ditch the first two paragraphs. I assume your story starts with the Mars Prep Colony so let your query start there two. The rest is back story that I'm sure works in your novel, but isn't really…"
"We’re happy you’re here and know you must be eager to get started. We’ve prepared a NEW MEMBERS WELCOME PAGE just for you--please be sure to visit there first to help acclimate you to the site, community and content. You will also…"
Query need work? Hankering for a second (or third, or fourth, et al) opinion on it? Well, you've come to the right place! Once a week, we'll post a query, offer opinions and discuss ways to improve it. Queries accepted from Premium members ONLY.See More
We’re happy you’re here and know you must be eager to get started. We’ve prepared a NEW MEMBERS WELCOME PAGE just for you--please be sure to visit there first to help acclimate you to the site, community and content. You will also find links to FREQUENTLY ASKED QUESTIONS, ABOUT US, COMMUNITY RULES and MEMBERSHIP INFORMATION helpful. As YALITCHAT.ORG operates on a tiered membership structure some of our services and groups are available to those who have a TIER II level membership. For more information, please visit the MEMBERSHIP INFORMATION page. If you have any questions, please let me know. Otherwise, we invite you to introduce yourself in the Meet and Greet section of our forum! Have fun getting to know YALITCHAT.ORG, and our various groups! Our Group Coordinators and community leaders are always here to help if you need it. Again, welcome! Please feel free to start making friends. You can start by sending me a friend request if you like!
An annual (automatically renewed) fee is REQUIRED for Premium Member accessto groups like: Submissions Mailbox, Query Kick-Around, Synopsis Repair Shop, Agent Insider II, Promotion Junction and Teen and Tween Research Info.