I was talking with Georgia a bit before YALITCHAT tonight, and she said you all were a friendly bunch and it was okay to ask here in the forums for a bit of help. I had a query letter I was pretty…Continue
"I live in Burlington right outside of greensboro! My sister lives in Lexington now....Great to meet someone nearby :) Just followed your awesome blog! Did you hear that Harris (author of the true blood books) is coming in may? "
"Brandi, I think you've gotten some good feedback on the content of the query but your reply above brings to light something I think may be a problem. You say that over half the story takes place before the accident that causes her coma. A key…"
"Thanks for the help so far. A good chunk-more than half of my story takes place before the coma, which is why I tried to focus on the relationship.
Thanks for the comments about the last paragraph--I'll work on it. :)"
"I think the single POV is a good idea, for clarity's sake, but what's missing here is a hook. You focus more on plot details than the theme or big idea that's going to make the agent want to read this book. This is…"
"From this exact query from Writeoncon:
Jessie and Ben admire one another from afar until the love of horseback riding brings them together. Fearful to ride after a previous accident, Jessie looks to Ben for guidance, trusting in his strength…"
"Oh, and Stephanie--they aren't required, I was just working with what I know an agent likes--what was my 2nd, now my first paragraph, which doesn't work solely from Jessie's POV.
I've done versions from Jessie's,…"
"Thanks for the feedback everyone.
The story starts at the lessons, and getting a glimpse of what Ben's dreams are. The accident and coma don't happen until halfway in. Is it okay to lead with the 2nd paragraph? I know that the agent…"
I live in Burlington right outside of greensboro! My sister lives in Lexington now....Great to meet someone nearby :) Just followed your awesome blog! Did you hear that Harris (author of the true blood books) is coming in may?
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