"Thanks for the feedback everyone.
I won a pitch contest last year for this story. My prize was feedback on my synopsis and first 20 pages. The agent said that based on my synopsis, he didn't think there was enough world building in my…"
"I don't know how Jessie copied the pdf. It won't copy for me - either into a doc, text, or in this box. I can't do a line-by-line, but my general impressions are:
I didn't quite understand the first two paragraphs. I think you…"
"I'm hooked here.Seventeen-year-old Jan Marco has a reputation as a thrill seeker with a death wish. All she really wants is peace be more specific, but it takes a steady diet of adrenalin to keep the nightmares of her past Be…"
"Very interesting idea, Andrea! I'm confused though. Are the Storm Chasers linked to Rain? And, if so, how exactly? I need a sentence about what the Storm Chasers are and what their goal is earlier in the synopsis. Why weren't one of…"
"Andrea, thanks for sharing your synopsis. I agree with Jessie's assessment. I am in no way a synopsis of expert first and foremost, I must say but here are my two cents, take it or leave it. ;)
I did find the story intriguing after I got…"
"Andrea - I think you have a very original concept here, but parts of your synopsis left me confused when I really want to know what happens!
Ten thousand years ago, a meteorite hit the earth[,] disintegrating a woman along the way. Instead of dying,…"
"Sounds like a fun book.
I'm really torn. I really like starting with the last two lines, but I've heard that a synopsis should be in third person. If I was to summ your story in a few sentences it seems like. Girl becomes grim…"
I just quit my job and started a program to become a high school chemistry and math teacher. Can I mention this to the 28 people in my class. It is a mixture of future language arts, math, social studies, science, music and geography…"
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