Lucy and her family's trip to the Drive-In is a night to remember.
Age range 4 and up.
Word count 704.

Tags: 4+., Drive-In., Humor., Memories., Picture, book.

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I look forward to reading this, Melissa. I'll try to critique it by Wednesday. I'm very busy writing my YA novel for nanowrimo.
Thanks Mayra.
All the best with nanowrimo. I'm trying to shoehorn my own new YA ms into the format, but not having much success. One of these years when I don't have teenagers and toddlers to distract me, I swear I'll do it.
Hi Melissa!
I took a break from NaNo-ing and took a look at your PB ms. I had a little trouble relating because I think I went to a drive-in just once in my life. I've really only seen them in movies on the TV. Your prose is excellent though. :-)
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Laura:

Thanks so much for taking time out of your NaNoWrMo schedule to look at the ms.
Though born and raised in Ireland, I have lived in the US for the past 20 years or so. We're lucky enough to have a drive-in in our town--one of the 400 or so left in the US--and it's an amazing family experience. I wrote an article on the history of the Drive-In which appeared in Cricket, the leading literary magazine for kids over here. I was actually aiming for a slice-of-life story here, as opposed to a big, life-changing event. I have seen plenty of these on the shelves of our local library, so they are being published. But the question is, as you pointed out, will it appeal to kids. I had imagined the pictures carrying much of the humor, and in certain places explanations for the text (such as the dancing hotdog--a staple of intermission during the 50s and 60s).

I'd be delighted to take a look at your revisions but will wait until the brain cells are a bit fresher!

Cheers.
They're publishing slice-of-life stories?? Well, how come all the PB witers jumped all over my case when I first showed them my PB a year ago? (Zig, the lion tamer, was a tiny part. It was short and mainly about the crazy circus.) *stomps foot* Darn-it! Everyone told me a children's story had to be just like an adult's with an MC, a conflict, a character arc and a resolution.

I feel cheated!

Plus, I've been telling all the PB authors that I crit that they have to have a plot, and their story can't be slice-of-life. *blushes*

I know Cricket. Great that you got in there! So just disregard my concerns and only look at my punctuation corrections. (At least I know something about grammar!)
Laura--
I hear you!
Just read an interesting post on Tara Lazar's blog (part of piboidmo) about non-conventional approaches to writing PBs. Here's the link taralazar.wordpress.com/2010/11/02/piboidmo-day-2-2/
(For some reason the link button above is not accepting this.)

I think the bottom line is, all good PBs--ie those that get published--need a strong narrative, even if it's not a conventional storyline. I'm off to take a look at your rewrite.

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