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Join to have the first 5 pages of your mss reviewed by members of #YAlitchat. You must be a member here to participate. Group Coordinator: Jessie Harrell
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Latest Activity: May 11
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If you want to upload your first five, follow these steps:
1. Start a discussion in the Discussion Forum (below)
2. Name your discussion with the title and author
3. Fill in the required fields and select your file to upload (it's helpful to list the genre and a 1-2 sentence "log line" about the work so we have a little context).
4. PLEASE UPLOAD ONLY .pdf FILES (this is for your own protection and that of the people who will review and critique your work)
5. Your work should be DOUBLE SPACED, as if you were submitting to an agent
GM: This is the PDF file creator that I use. You simply print your Word doc to the PDF program and save as a PDF. There are plenty of others, including Cute PDF which I have also used for years. I've also gotten a recommendation for this one from one of our members: http://www.doc2pdf.net/
Reviewers should leave their critiques in the appropriate discussion. Remember that #YAlitchat RULES ON PLAGIARISM apply to this group. Click here to view the rules. http://yalitchat.ning.com/page/rules-1
IMPORTANT: Your work can only remain active for THREE (3) WEEKS. At the end of three weeks, you need to delete your posting. I will close the discussion at that time so you will not be able to receive any more feedback. If you do not delete your discussion after two months have passed, I will delete it for you. There is NO WAY TO RETRIEVE comments once they are deleted. It's your responsibility to get what you need in a timely manner.
If you need anything, please contact Group Coordinator, Jessie Harrell. You can e-mail firstpages@yalitchat.org with questions, comments or concerns.
Discussion Forum
The Walking Sticks by Sharron Riddle
Started by Sharron Riddle Houdek. Last reply by Sharron Riddle Houdek May 11. 2 Replies 0 Likes
Hi Everyone! I have completed this YA horror and would greatly appreciate any feedback on the first pages. This is my query:Kerry Kingston collects strange things, so she’s thrilled with the gift of…Continue
TO SAVE MY LIFE - Lindsey Frydman
Started by lindsey frydman May 4. 0 Replies 0 Likes
Here's my logline and first five pages for my sci-fi romance, TO SAVE MY LIFE.The Artificial Intelligence and Robotics Lab created Aiden, but when he escapes to avoid destruction, his life depends on…Continue
"The Other Side of Happy"
Started by Caryn DeVincenti. Last reply by Abigail Johnson May 2. 1 Reply 0 Likes
Seventeen-year-old Carleigh Anderson is saddled with poverty, a drug-addicted mother, and her mother's abusive boyfriend. Add her missing father to the equation and you'll understand why she's become…Continue
Starry Starry Night by Abigail Johnson
Started by Abigail Johnson. Last reply by Abigail Johnson May 2. 2 Replies 0 Likes
This is a contemporary YA with a strong coming of age/romance theme. It's about a sixteen year old girl experiencing heartbreak and love for the first time during the summer after her mother takes…Continue
HEIRLOOM
Started by Sandra S. Rice. Last reply by Sandra S. Rice Apr 19. 6 Replies 0 Likes
Hi everyone. I’ve picked up this WIP and reworked it. I hope I’ve made it unique enough and that it has a better theme this time. Although HEIRLOOM is urban fantasy, the contemporary setting…Continue
MIND RIFT YA Thriller
Started by Elizabeth Arroyo. Last reply by Elizabeth Arroyo Apr 16. 2 Replies 0 Likes
Hi Everyone,Any comments or suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thanks,Continue
IMPERIUM YA sci-fi
Started by Dina von Lowenkraft. Last reply by Elizabeth Arroyo Apr 15. 5 Replies 0 Likes
Here are the first five pages of my YA sci-fi entitled IMPERIUM.One line pitch (Not sure this pitch really gets the idea of the story across very well):Seventeen-year-old Xor wakes up 100 years too…Continue
Tags: Imperium
TIGER DAUGHTER by Ashley Walker
Started by Ashley Walker. Last reply by Ashley Walker Mar 24. 8 Replies 0 Likes
I'd appreciate comments on the opening to TIGER DAUGHTER, a YA contemporary adventure told from the POV of a family of circus cats and their rescuer, Mei. (The cat POV makes up only about 5% of…Continue
Legendary by L.H. Nicole
Started by Lisa Hood. Last reply by Sandra S. Rice Mar 22. 2 Replies 0 Likes
Legendary is the first book in a new YA fantasy saga breathing new life and twists into the classic Arthurian legends, creating a realm of fantasy and adventure in modern time picking up where the…Continue
Shattering Vengeance - YA Dark fantasy.
Started by Soumi Roy. Last reply by Soumi Roy Mar 12. 8 Replies 0 Likes
Hi Everyone,I'm currently working on a YA dark Fantasy inspired by Phantom of the Opera with mystery at its core.I have previously uploaded the prologue but after a bit rework I've uploaded it again…Continue
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Staff Comment by Jessie Harrell on February 24, 2012 at 8:28am -
Better late than never, that's my motto!
Happy Friday all. The discussions that need your attention this weekend are:FOR THE LAST TIME
NATURAL SELECTION
If you have time, please drop in the give Lisa and Alexis the benefit of your critiques. Thanks and have a great weekend!
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Staff Comment by Jessie Harrell on February 13, 2012 at 9:18am -
Happy Monday, everyone!
Since I skipped last week, we have a TON of discussions timing out this week. If you have time in the next 168 hours (week), please stop in and leave some feedback for these folks ~EXTRACTION
EL COMPUESTO
FOR THE LAST TIME
NATURAL SELECTION
REAPER'S NOVICE
BURNING QUESTIONS
THE DIARIES OF ELLA GRAHAM
I DIED ON A TUESDAY
Also, a note to the authors: When you have what you need from your feedback, please go ahead and delete your discussion. I allow the discussions to stay up for 2 months before deleting them, but you are welcome to help keep our space clean. There's no need for an unnecessary discussion to stay live. THANK YOU!
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Staff Comment by Jessie Harrell on February 3, 2012 at 1:25pm -
I love a great beginning as much as the next person, but sometimes I just want some real romance. If you want to share 250 words from your steamiest YA scene, consider joining the That's YAmore Blogfest hosted by Oasis for YA. Even if you don't post, please remember to drop by the hop and take in the love fest.
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Staff Comment by Jessie Harrell on February 2, 2012 at 2:29pm -
Hello all -- I'm late checking in with you this week. Lots of good discussions going on up there. On behalf of the authors, I thank you for the time you're taking to leave feedback. We only have 2 discussions timing out this week:
SWAY
BETWEEN US AND SPIRITLAND
If you want to give these stories one last look, please do so by Sunday, as I will be closing the discussions by Monday. Thanks and have a great weekend!
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Comment by Bonnie Ferrante on January 28, 2012 at 6:35pm -
Hi. Burning Questions is for ages 10-14. Makayka's first few weeks of junior high school are nothing like she expected. Her BFF shuns her, her boy friend is looking elsewhere, mysterious fires plague the neighbourhood, and she has formed an odd friendship with a goth girl with attitude and a younger genius. But, stranger than all of this, is that the gift from Uncle Karl seems to have a mind of its own.Burning%20Questions%20-%20Bonnie%20Ferrante.pdf
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Staff Comment by LM Preston on January 28, 2012 at 11:53am -
Synop Repair needs some help/comments.
Mari C. has her's up for review.
http://yalitchat.ning.com/group/synopsisrepairshop/forum/topics/fal...
Thanks for supporting her!
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Staff Comment by Jessie Harrell on January 27, 2012 at 9:07am -
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Staff Comment by Jessie Harrell on January 24, 2012 at 10:55am -
The Agent Pitch Slam Finalist have been named -- CONGRATS to them all!
The following are official finalists and may resubmit their original entry through January 30, 2012. Any other submissions will be deleted. Additionally, PLEASE DO NOT ADD COMMENTS TO YOUR SUBMISSION, UNLESS A JUDGE ASKS YOU A QUESTION. ALL ADDITIONAL COMMENTS WILL BE DELTED--including thank-yous.
- EXTRACTION by Stephanie Diaz
- THE PACKING HOUSE by G. Donald Gibbs
- KARNEPHEAR by Clifford Piel
- AERIAL MYSTIQUE by Ryann Kerekes
- MY SISTER'S REAPER by Dorothy Dreye
- GOING DOWN IN FLAMES by Chris Canada
- AERIAL MYSTIQUE by Ryann Kerekes (this entry received 2 votes)
- OVER THE DEEP FRIED RAINBOW by Leslie Rose
- GIDEON'S INN by Joe Richardson
- SWEET AMBROSIA by Sophia Cheng
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Staff Comment by C. Lee McKenzie on January 22, 2012 at 9:35pm -
Jessie, you crack me up! Loved your WELCOME comment. Congrats to Helene. That's wonderful. I'll have my cat do a dance for her, too.
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Staff Comment by Jessie Harrell on January 22, 2012 at 9:17pm -
First, we've had quite a few new members join us in the past couple of weeks. If you're new here:
Second, I'm getting a jump on the week and listing the discussions that will be timing out next Sunday. PLEASE -- if you have time, drop in and leave some feedback for these folks:WAITING
SWAY
BETWEEN US AND SPIRIT LAND
THE LOST GET FOUND
FLOWER GIRLS
PARA WARS
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