Second Chance Pitch Slam is here! Please read below for rules, and information on how to participate!
If you have already participated in Pitch Slam 2, Second Chance Pitch Slam is a chance to be seen and read again, only this time, by a group of great small presses interested in reading your work whether historical, contemporary, paranormal, science fiction or something of a mash-up! Judges hail from InkSpell Publishing, Tribute Books, Magpie Eclectic Press and Month9Books!
For a list of participating publisher bios, click here!
PLEASE DO NOT COMMENT, ADD PITCHES OR OTHERWISE UPDATE, DELETE, REMOVE, INCLUDE, ADD, REVISE, RESPOND, ETC. to any of the below pitches unless you are one of the participating judges. All of the rules of Pitch Slam 2 apply to Second Chance Pitch Slam. Please be sure to read the rules prior to posting. All comments not made by judges will be deleted.
If a judge/small press wants to see more of your submission, they will reply with a note asking you to send it. Judges may not comment on your submission, or they may give their opinion about how to improve. PLEASE DO NOT RESPOND TO COMMENTS, QUESTIONS, RHETORICAL QUESTIONS.
Judges will read your pitches July 1-14, 2012. For those of you who did not originally participate in Pitch Slam 2, you will have a chance again in September when we hold Pitch Slam 3.
The pitches will be 5-6 sentences in length and should be pasted in the COMMENTS section with your full name and title of the work. No pitch longer than 6 sentences will be considered. The pitch should give the reader an idea of what the story is about, including the major conflict. For example, below is a pitch for Harrry Potter.
"Harry Potter is the most miserable, lonely boy you can imagine. He’s shunned by his relatives, and forced to live in the cupboard under the stairs. Harry’s world gets turned upside down on his 11th birthday, when an invite to attend Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry arrives. He learns of the evil Lord Voldemort who killed his parents, and then tried and failed to kill Harry when he was an infant. Harry later learns he was saved for a reason." -- from Wiki Summaries
Members will enter pitches beginning Monday May 28, 2012 at 9AM EST. You may post pitches (as many as you have) any time between Monday May 28, 2012 and Monday June 4, 2012. YOU MAY ONLY POST PITCHES FOR TITLES THAT ARE COMPLETE.
Agent judges may read and respond pitches at any time.
During the week of June 4-11 however, agent judges will read and respond to/comment on pitches.
Judges will be looking for their top 5 pitches (per judge). A total of TWENTY (there are 4 judges) members will have a chance to revise and resubmit based on agent feedback. These are the TWENTY finalists. You may ONLY revise and resubmit IF a judge requests that you do so in the comments they make to you. Judges are instructed to ignore any revise and resubs which have not been approved.
Upon completion of pitch review, judges will POST their top 5 pitches by author and title, establishing the top 20 finalists ON June 22 no later than 3PM EST. So be sure to check back then!
Once posted, those finalists will have a chance to revise and repost during the weekend of June 22-30, 2012.
Judges will review the revised pitches and choose 1 (each judge) as winners: 1. The best and 2. A second best, and 3. Runner up, by July 15.
The four who win the top designation will be awarded a full manuscript critique from whichever judge has chosen them. However, judges may request more than one manuscript from members of the top twenty, or from ANY pitch they like, regardless of whether the pitch itself made it into the top twenty.
Pitch Slam 2 Agent Judge Profiles
Tamar Rydzinski worked at Sanford J. Greenburger Associates prior to joining the Laura Dail Literary Agency. She graduated from Yeshiva University in 2003 with a major in literature and a minor in business.
Tamar is not interested in prescriptive or practical non-fiction, humor, coffee table books or children’s books (meaning anything younger than middle grade). She is interested in everything else that is well-written and has great characters, including graphic novels. A fantastic query letter is essential – “you need to make me want to read your book, and be excited to read it,” she says, “with those first couple of paragraphs.”
Pam van Hylckama Vlieg joined Larsen Pomada as an Associate Literary Agent in 2012 to represent young adult and middle grade children's book authors. Over the past four years Pam has become one of the top YA book bloggers in the country at Bookalicious.org. She partners her blog with Hicklebee's, a children's bookstore in San Jose, CA.
Pam writes fantastical YA and MG fiction and is represented by Laurie McLean, also of Larsen Pomada Literary Agents. She lives in the Bay Area of California with her Dutch husband, two children--a boy and a girl the perfect set--a Jack Russell terrier, a bulldog puppy, and a small guinea pig. It is her greatest dream to own a menagerie.
Michelle Witte* is an agent at the Mansion Street Literary Agency. She is interested a variety of YA & MG fiction, including: Magical realism (think Sarah Addison Allen for teens/tweens), Obscure fairytale retellings (Just say no to 12 Dancing Princesses!), Fantasy, Supernatural (creatures you run from, not date), Sci-fi, Mystery/Suspense, Adventure, Contemporary realistic, Historical. Michelle is a bit weary of Paranormal Romance and Dystopian at the moment. She would love to find a great manuscript that is:
Elana Roth* is an agent at Red Tree Literary. She's a Brooklyn-based creative type, specifically of the word variety. After 4 years of agenting at other people's companies, she opened Red Tree Literary to continue working with a select list of children's and young adult authors on her own.
How she fell in love with children's content is a long story that begins by sheer dumb luck with an internship at Nickelodeon Magazine. Books followed when she began working as an editor at Parachute Publishing, where she spent 5 years learning the publishing ropes on series for kids of all ages (and that includes some adults). She switched to agenting in 2008.
Educationally, Elana is a graduate of Barnard College and the Jewish Theological Seminary, where she earned degrees in English literature and Bible. Surprisingly, it's that second degree which comes more in handy when trying to make conversation at cocktail parties.
* YALITCHAT.ORG member
ADVICE FOR A SUCCESFUL PITCH
Pitches are open to members of YALITCHAT.ORG, regardless of tier. Do encourage friends who aren't members to join, and pitch their Young Adult or Middle Grade titles.
DO pitch only Young Adult and Middle Grade titles. May be speculative, contemporary, historical, non-fiction.
DO test your pitch out in Query Kick-Around or First Pages for feedback from other YALITCHAT.ORG members.
DO have a friend or colleague read your pitch for clarity, spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
DO use as many lines are as needed to form a fully-realized pitch.
DO sample pitches online for the proper format. Google is your friend.
DO NOT present the same pitch more than once.
DO NOT delete a previous pitch that was commented on by an agent judge, because it had errors, and replace it with a new one. The new one will NOT be read.
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DO NOT pitch a title that has not been written, or in is the process of being written, or you are considering writing, etc. YOU MAY ONLY PITCH COMPLETED, fully revised, and edited titles.
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Wishing you all the best of luck. This forum will open for comments on Monday May 28, 2012. If you have any problems pitching, or posting, please contact member support at email@example.com, and someone will respond to your note within 48-hours.
First, I need to jump in here about the writing of this pitch alone. I'm seeing red flags with sentence structure and awkward punctuation. I realize this may seem superficial, but there are way too many subordinate clauses and then excessive commas here. Edit and proofread carefully.
Now, content...holy wow is there a lot going on in here. And please decide if this is MG or YA. It can't be both.
The Fantastical Adventures of a Boy Named Al - MG adventure/fantasy - Gayle C. Krause
If thirteen-year-old Al Hero, an aspiring cartoonist, could have one of his comic book superheroes as a mentor he’d make short work of his nemesis, Big Louie Fontaine.
Instead, he makes a deal with Beano Smartbotton, a sarcastic garden gnome who comes to life in his grandfather’s back yard and offers Al an answer to his bully problem in exchange for helping him rescue his sweetheart. Desperate for a solution, Al agrees and follows the gnome into a parallel world. What he doesn’t realize is that he’d be running into battle with Goblin warriors, not once, but twice, ducking poison-tipped knives of an evil Gypsy King, and hiding his identity in the armor of a Golden Knight, as he fights a shape shifting witch in order to save an unlikely princess. Al returns with a fully illustrated original comic book documenting his action adventures, titled, The Fantastical Adventures of a Boy Named Al. With newfound confidence he faces Big Louie and saves the kids at Riverside Middle School, living up to his name, A. Hero.
I really like this pitch as well. you put a lot of thought into your sentences and it shows.
This blurb does a much better job of offering up specific details that make it stand out. But the italicizing of verbs throughout feels like its trying too hard.
I, like Michelle, don't like the italicizing. And furthermore, words like "sweetheart" and "newfound" don't sound very middle-grady. They may be just for the pitch, but I always look for voice to shine through in the pitch, too.
I'm lost. Where do the comic books fit into the fantasy adventure? Is that a superficial construct just to give the fantasy a new spin?
The names are all throwing me off too. Very tongue-in-cheek...
Month9Books would love to read this. Please send your first 3 chapters to us at firstname.lastname@example.org with Yalitchat pitch slam in subject line. Please also send your original pitch. Thanks!
This sounds interesting, and you have captured my attention. However, I'm curious about why Beano the Garden Gnome chose to come to life, and why Al is special enough to have the gnome seek his help. Leaving these questions unanswered always has me wonder if the actual reason behind the (insert-magical-creature-here) revealing himself to (insert-main-character-name-here) is only a superficial reason, or if there is more behind it than that.
This is definitely a curious pitch, though, and you have my interest. The story itself sounds like it could be a good old fashioned adventure perfect for middle graders. I would like to take a look at the manuscript. :) Please send your original pitch, your query, and the first three chapters of your manuscript (including a prologue, if you have one) to email@example.com. Also, include your name and contact information in the body of the email, and the title "Yalichat Second Chance Pitch Slam" in the subject line. Thank you! :D
Nazarea, I am assuming this is YA scifi? You may want to put that in. You did a great job here with the synopsis. I think that the names may be too exotic for some. Unpronounceable for me.
You've offered up some interesting ideas, but I wish it still gave a few more details, like what kind of game the girl is playing, and even her name. What kind of bloodsport? "danger and death" are fairly generic when there are so many other great descriptors to use.
The separated by galaxies is a good point, and something I'd introduce a bit sooner.
I actually like this pitch a lot. I generally like more details, but if this was the first paragraph of a query, I would keep reading hoping to get to them.